Reminds me (verse esp) of a puddle of mud song - if you like that sort of thing. The voice is very cobain-esq and fits well within the grunge style i think you were aiming for, unfortunately i found the lyrics pseudo-sentimental and cringeworthy IMHO.
The intro, chorus and bridge were really enjoyable with nice chord progression (not sure if thats a second guitar or use of pinky for the high notes - that add ring through nicely. Unfortunately its all let down by a generic grunge style verse/vocal style that stinks of someone straining their voice to sound like Cobain. Please take it as constructive criticism that its better to find your own vocal style than imitate the legendary.
Hey man, thanks for the honest opinion. I think the lyrical problem is a good point. They were totally just filler. Of course, they must have meant something when I wrote them, but now that I wrote the song so long ago, looking back at what I was singing shows me that I need to clue in my audience to WHY I'm feeling, and not simply THAT I am feeling. For example:
My lyrics "Close your eyes and or your mouth to hear the words that provide outs." is a valid feeling, but whose eyes should be closed? Whose mouth? What words provide outs? I am feeling something, but why? I give no hint. I then go on to sing "Your perfume gives me the blues. Red lipstick and black tattoos on you." which once again is quite vague. Whose perfume? Why does it give me emotional pain? (The blues.) Red lipstick and black tattoos is nice imagery, but on whose lips and body do these superficial things exist?
I could go on and on about the lyrics. Poorly written, and as you can no doubt tell, written on the spot. This usually happens to me when I write a song on the guitar that I am so excited about that I what to quickly stitch together some bullshit lyrics.
The guitar is in fact all me though. One guitar. One take. I'm glad this one saving grace could allow you to vote 2 stars on this lyrical and vocal abomination of a song. Is that my A for effort? lol
Thanks, man! It was really more inspired by the Follin brothers' compositions on the NES, specifically the Silver Surfer soundtrack. If you haven't heard any of those tunes, do yourself a favor and find them on YouTube.
well its kinda like the first Zelda game in the context of gameplay. the idea is as Zelda went on it got more linear and I thought it would be cool to make a game that plops you into the middle of a vast world that you could just explore. that isn't the most interesting concept in this game though I want people to be surprised when they find out what it is.
Nice track - I'd have to disagree with previous reviews and say the drums are alittle overpowering maybe a little less treble on them. Otherwise very nice track.
Reminds me of the acoustic SOAD tracks of the early 2000's, not to sure of the number of fucks used so knocked one mark off otherwise really good. 5 stared + downloaded.